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What do you think 'bout the wee message that I wrote today?
Hello,
it's a long time ago that we've heard from each other.
Hopefully everything's allright in Canada? How's the going?
I do very wish that we could meet in June, indeed, but it's so as i told you, I'm out of pocket, unfortunately.
I would appreciate it to hear from you soon.
I'm thinking of you each 'n every day.

Take care, God bless

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Is it correct or what is wrong in my mail?
Supplement from 05/08/2008 11:24pm:
And what is about the other version:

It's been a long time since we had contact. Is everything allright in Canada? I wish we could meet in june but -it's like I told you- I'm out of money.

I'm looking forward hearing from you!
I think of you every day!

asked in english, grammar, corrections



tracieboo answers:

Well, I would word it a bit differently...

Hello,
It's been a while since we have spoken.
I hope everthing is well, how are things?
I really hope that we can meet up in June, but that will depend on my financial situation.
I often think about you and I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Take care and God bless x


Supplement from 05/08/2008 10:57pm:

I have just re-arranged what you have put, i might have written it differently myself.


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duffield1 answers:

I'd just pick up on the bit about money, as 'financial situation' sounds a bit formal. If you are talking to a friend, you'd often use slang for money, so might say 'I'm skint!' Or 'I'm broke!' or 'cash is a bit tight!' or even 'I'm a bit strapped for cash.'


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sheps101 answers:

lol who is the scot that taught you the word wee hehe not often I have heard a none scot use it!

Anyway my letter would go something like this

Hello,
How's things going? I hope all is well in Canada.
It's been so long since we were last in touch and I so much wish that we could meet in June, but unfortunately as I said before I just can not afford it at the moment, but please stay in touch.
I will be thinking of you each 'n every day.

Take care, God bless

The grammar might not be perfect but to me it reads better and is more friendly :)


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